This is a level of mine that’s been in the work for 4 months now, initially it was gonna be a solo, however I found myself quite inefficient working alone. So please, could I have some opinions/suggestions, and if you think you could help a guy out please

This is a level of mine that’s been in the work for 4 months now, initially it was gonna be a solo, however I found myself quite inefficient working alone. So please, could I have some opinions/suggestions, and if you think you could help a guy out please